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Here are two brothers for whom others weep.
Each brother has fallen to enmity's keep.
The truth of the matter: these two grew apart
When too many words were taken to heart.
Yet, the brothers' skills are surpassed by no man,
For if one can't compete, the other one can.
If only the two would have it as such,
But the pain of admitting would hurt far too much.
So this way they shall stay as hate pulls and tugs,
The brothers' whole conflict swept under a rug.

Though, if one brother fell, the remaining would weep,
Despite what he'd have you believe.
This is my first thought out piece of poetry. Usually I would just write stuff, hate what I'd written, and give up. This time I actually kind of like what I've written, even if it is a little short.

It's pretty much to anyone with a troubled brotherhood. I wrote it while listening to "Bratja" from the Fullmetal Alchemist soundtrack.

Well, enjoy.
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LucasCAPS Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009   Writer
The great deal about this is exactly the shortness. So complex, so good and so small, OMG! Not to mention the great metric!
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SakuraKokoro Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2006
This is really good
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fUnKySaXoPhOnIsT Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2005
this really captures the love that siblings share even though they often fight...
its so sad... and really makes me wish I had brothers or sisters... even though they are sometimes pains in the ass
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aForgottenSin Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
Very good. I think the best poem i've read in awhile.
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Platinus Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2005  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow,man! Good job! A definite keeper. Simply delightful
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Smips Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2005
very good. i never really liked poetry, but i do like this. keep it up
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shteffanos Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2005
beautifully written.
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